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Thursday, April 11, 2019

E-book, Sushi

Sushi by Alani

This is the narrative that I have been working on these past two weeks, called Sushi. 
It is about a girl who moved to an all creatures school, just for mythical beings. 
She meets a boy called Jasper, the rest is in the book. Leave a comment and let me
know how you think I did. Have you enjoyed it?
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2 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 2, 2019 at 12:27 PM

    Hi Alani! This piece of writing is really good! You must of put a lot of effort into it. One thing I really liked was how you didn't have a link to the story, so it was really easy reading your story (I love a good romance story). One thing you could improve, is having an introduction. It could be easy as saying hi!. I really enjoyed your story, - Ellen :)

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  2. AnonymousAugust 8, 2019 at 9:42 AM

    Hi Ellen,
    Oh no! It (my story) was very cringy, but thanks for the feedback and I'm happy that you enjoyed it!
    -Alani

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